Six Sentence Sunday, 9 December 2012 (Cleopatra’s Ironclads)

“I remember when you were in the palace, when I was stationed here under Gabinius. What a slip of a girl, and yet your eyes—“

She inclined her head and smiled. 

“Oh, not their beauty, Your Majesty. Their wisdom. You missed nothing, not a trick. I’d seen grizzled old generals who had less of that look than this girl of fifteen.”

This entry was posted in NaNoWriMo, Writing and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

11 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday, 9 December 2012 (Cleopatra’s Ironclads)

  1. Vivien Dean says:

    I’ll take that over beauty any day. 😉 Well done!

  2. Sue says:

    Good man, could see her destiny at an early age

  3. Very insightful six! I like how he was able to see this about her at so young an age

  4. He shows great perception!

  5. Love how he’s changed the compliment into being about her wisdom.

  6. susanroebuck says:

    Excellent excerpt – you’ve said so much in so few sentences.

  7. Elin Gregory says:

    That says a much about Marcus as it does about Cleopatra. Very nice six.

  8. E. Jamie says:

    I love the feel of this snippet. Definitely want to to read!

  9. epbeaumont says:

    Thank you all for the great comments! Over the last two days I have been cleaning up the NaNo 2012 manuscript and it’s now with its first three beta readers.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s