Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 8 June 2014 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

“Ooh!” Yasmin said. “What do you see?”

“I see the heat playing through you all, and the cold spots in the Dome, and the storms overhead, and the hush-and-rush of our blood, like the tides of the Ancient Sea.”

“Is it true, that sailors on Karis travel over water?” asked Jehen. “Yasmin says it’s a story.”

“Oh no, little sister, it’s the truth, plain as day. You’ve seen pictures, and they’re no fancy. Karis the Mother of Worlds is three-quarters water.”


Dialogue between Mavra Two-Eyes, returnee starship captain with a cybernetic eye, and Yasmin Sure-Hand, age four-going-on-five, from novel-in-progress, Ship’s Heart. 

Weekend Writing Warriors offers eight-sentence excerpts from a variety of writers; see the other excerpts here.

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6 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 8 June 2014 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

  1. Gorgeous prose, especially the second paragraph. Excellent excerpt!

  2. Wonderfully imaginative snippet. Thanks.

  3. Yeah, what Veronica said. Reads like poetry! And Charmaine–I agree. What an imagination.

    EP, you have me hooked in a few short sentences! Great 8 🙂

  4. Botanist says:

    Very atmospheric interchange. Wonder what kind of world they are used to that the idea of seafaring is so strange?

  5. Lovely prose, as usual.

  6. burnsmillie says:

    I love the hush and rush of our blood!

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