Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 9 August 2015 (WIP: Shipwright, Captain, Figurehead)

Storm-gate, Naime celebrated with the apprentices in the workshop, and the Master of the Yard, who was a patron-cousin of her elder-father on the Iskra side. A delegation of fresh-faced cadets and students from the New Academy came all the way out from the shore of the Inland Sea on the fast train that several Zoia clan-branches and two branches of the Iskri had constructed in honor of the peace of Naime the Just, now most of a century ago.

The snowy volcanic reaches of North Continent, with its Water-Temple guest-houses built around hot springs, and the steppes and mountains of South Continent, where the journey-ships’ horse-stocks roamed wild and recombined in all their glory, not to mention the Colonies within a Jump, all sent their youthful tribute to the New Academy.

Desnaray of Iskra, the clan-branch famed for the terraforming of the first colony-planets, had its own little group of cadets, whispering together. They raised the flaming punch in its goblets, extinguished the flames with a single sharp out-breath, like a voice-blow in grappling, and tipped their heads back to drink.

Indeed, a voice-blow. On the right shoulder of each of them, a shoulder-cord and ribbon-rosette of white and red, slashed diagonally so the cut ends hung loose. The knot, cut through: one of the other traditional props of Martis-Mortis, the sword and the cut-knot, the sword that erased difficulties by severing them through to show white of nerves, red of blood or flesh.

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From Camp NaNoWriMo project Shipwright, Captain, Figurehead, short stories in the Ship’s Heart universe.

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8 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 9 August 2015 (WIP: Shipwright, Captain, Figurehead)

  1. Absolutely beautiful writing! I can feel the excitement in the air, over whatever it is that they’re whispering about.

  2. I don’t like the idea of that sword severing to the white of nerves. Good visualization.

  3. Wow, beautiful snippet! Visually and poetically constructed. Seriously, wow.

  4. daezarkian says:

    You could write books on world building and prose. Marvelous!

  5. naomi shaw says:

    One word. Fabulous!!

  6. The details you build in are always nothing short of amazing to me. Another excellent excerpt!

  7. This is a gorgeous and spooky snippet. Well done!

  8. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Interesting. I hadn’t pictured these peoples as builders of high-speed trains.

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