Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 3 April 2016 (Ship’s Heart)

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Yasmin Sure-Hand had seen a lot of mourning, back home and here at the Academy. She had never seen anyone mourn as Yasmin-3 did, with the blood-spotted rosette on her white shoulder cord, and her face nearly as pale and set as her white funeral garments. She and Phila had been together; now they were apart forever and she mourned him in cold fury.

Yasmin found herself afraid for the first time. Every time she looked in that direction, Yasmin-3 glared back at her.

She remembered how fearful Jehen had been of Phila after that first flying class, and now she understood. That impersonal hatred, intensely focused, could have nothing to do with her; they did not know each other and only shared a name.

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POV Yasmin Sure-Hand, from NaNo 2015 novel project, Ship’s Heart.

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7 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 3 April 2016 (Ship’s Heart)

  1. Oh MY, trouble ahead for sure. I appreciated the fine details about the mourning – your worldbuilding is always so complete. Terrific snippet!

  2. Peter Vialls says:

    Intriguing snippet. Two characters linked through their own name and the name of a dead man. I’ll be fascinated to see where this leads.

  3. It seems so strange to hate someone impersonally. I bet it can lead to some terrible behavior, though– 3 better watch out!

  4. Ed Hoornaert says:

    You’ve sketched out a complicated relationship in just a few words. Nicely done! Also, I’m glad the hater is 3, not 4. The latter number has different connotations these days.

  5. astonwest says:

    Sounds like a battle is a-brewing between the two Yasmins…

  6. Great snippet with a lot of complex emotions. I really liked it!

  7. Loads of information but it didn’t slow down the pace. Nicely done!

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