Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 26 June 2016 (WIP Ship’s Heart)

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The refectory was another puzzle: bright and airy, as if there were no need to keep shelter overhead. Everything on Karis felt flimsy, all verticals and clear glass, when Yasmin thought of spherical sections and cross-struts as the shape of shelter. Hull breach, the curse word of her childhood, had no such meaning here. They opened windows and let air circulate through rooms, dined in a vast hall with no section seals to partition in case of disaster.

It was hard to wrap her head around that notion. She shivered whenever air touched her skin. At home, that would have been the last thing she ever felt. Here, it was perfectly normal.


Full-body culture shock of planetary life, for young people raised in a terraforming dome. From work in progress, Ship’s Heart (NaNo 2015).

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7 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 26 June 2016 (WIP Ship’s Heart)

  1. Great snippet! I really liked the atmosphere.

  2. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Beautiful job of seeing this world from the point of view of a spacer.

  3. E.D. Martin says:

    You really captured the perspective of someone transported to a completely foreign environment.

  4. Botanist says:

    It’s always eye-opening to see our normality through the eyes of someone from a different background. Nice observations and details.

  5. Interesting perspective from Karis. I always admire the thoroughness of your world building. Of course the wide open spaces wouldn’t feel right! Excellent excerpt…

  6. Nice description. You really put in the moment.

  7. Great world build. Pulled me in immediately.

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