Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 3 July 2016 (WIP Ship’s Heart)

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Even in training exercises, her teacher said, Martisset moved with the atmosphere like a skilled rider with a wild horse, recognized that the planet had a mind of its own, and respected both its lawful and its wild aspects.

But then the metaphor was apt; at thirteen, Martisset had ridden with the adolescents in the South Continent horse-festival. She still remembered her giddy joy at seven years old, riding with the five-year-olds, tied to her mount in what was a barely controlled stampede. She was older than her South Continent kin but hadn’t had as much equestrian training, so she rode with the young ones.

A few summers with Yuki-Iskri’s kin, and she’d picked up a lot. Mostly because she wanted to, and because it felt like flying, joining her will to the horse’s intent, and forgetting her own awkward self.

She wasn’t going to be a racing-rider; she was too tall and gangly for that. But she learned archery, and she rode in the ritualized parade that was a distant descendant of a steppe-cavalry maneuver, charging and then turning in apparent retreat to shoot arrows back at an invisible enemy.

The hits were recorded by the herd-elders, conversing with the same satellites that tracked the fisheries of the True Ocean and the weather-systems turning overhead.


The skillful rider knows the mount has a mind of its own. From work in progress, Ship’s Heart (NaNo 2015).

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5 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 3 July 2016 (WIP Ship’s Heart)

  1. I love how you’re mixing the advanced tech and the age old rituals of archery and horseback riding in a way that makes complete sense. Great snippet!

  2. Botanist says:

    Hah! Veronica beat me to it. I was going to comment also on the intriguing mix of ancient skills and modern technology.

  3. Ed Hoornaert says:

    And I third Veronica’s comment; this was what struck me, too. BTW, I forgot to add my snippet to the WeWriWa list, but it’s up and eager for readers.

  4. It does work, the complexity of combining the new technology with the ancient customs.

  5. I fourth Veronica’s comment! Your writing is always gorgeous and unique. 😀

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