Summer NaNo: Three magical moments

Writing is full of magical moments. I’m in the middle of several of them right now: the glamour of first draft, the rewards of beta-reading, and the lessons of prolific production.

There’s the night before creation, when the story starts taking shape out of the fog.  I’m on vacation for two and a half weeks, and the first week of that was spent in reading for my Summer NaNo project, tentatively titled Leonie Hallward and the Secession of Greenwich Village. After alternating between Oscar Wilde’s Picture of Dorian Gray (and looking up its many film and stage adaptations) and Ross Wetzsteon’s Republic of Dreams: Greenwich Village: the American Bohemia, 1910-1960, the story started to take shape. In the course of a long walk, I got the picture of a black-haired, grey-eyed woman standing on the deck of a steamship headed to New York, and she started to tell me her story.

She’s Leonie Hallward, daughter of an English art dealer and a Franco-American watercolorist, and (more to the point of this story) the niece of Basil Hallward, whose infamous portrait of Dorian Gray, along with a number of other paintings, she is accompanying to New York to its new home in the Fifth Avenue mansion of an American millionaire.  I don’t know her story yet, except that she will be included in the party memorialized in John Sloan’s etching Arch Conspirators, who declared the secession of Greenwich Village from the USA one winter night in the teens of the twentieth century.

Leonie’s version of the picture will literally change history.

Meanwhile, I’m beta-reading my friends’ novels as they move from first to second draft, and watching them take the opening-chapter data-dump, chop it into elegant morsels of back-story, and distribute it throughout the story. In particular, I’m having the pleasure of watching Devin Harnois create a supernatural-metaphysical romp through world pantheons in Not My Apocalypse (excerpt from the first draft here) and Saint of Sinners (excerpt here), with foul-mouthed but goodhearted reluctant teenaged antichrist.

I’m also finishing detailed comments on an elegant time-travel romance by Angela QuarlesMust Love Breeches resonates with my inner history-lover, while teaching me valuable lessons about genre conventions and how far they can be stretched. Answer: Thus far, but much further than you’d think, in the hands of a true fan and master.

I’m also looking for the common threads in my own beta-readers’ responses. In the last year and a half, I’ve written and submitted to my first readers a rather extensive body of work: two novellas (30,000 words each), two long short stories (10,000 words each), and a full-length novel (98,000 words). The common theme: my raw-draft openings are pure chaos, space and time and characters rushing out with the speed (and confusion) of Niagara, but once I get hold of the thread of plot, things move along at a nice clip.

It doesn’t seem avoidable; it’s just the way my stories write themselves in raw draft. Watching my friends revise, I’ve learned that editing works wonders. The “wrong bits” might just be in the wrong place, and anything that doesn’t work after that can be cut. Raw draft is raw material, and raw material (as any sculptor will tell you) is there to be carved. Research is the mountain, raw draft the block, and final draft the statue. 

So I’m wiser, and happier, and ready to edit last year’s raw drafts while creating something new in all its glorious chaos.

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Six Sentence Sunday, 27 May 2012 (The Reincarnations of Miss Anne)

And so in the fullness of time it came to pass that Elsa got her transport, thanks to the chatty young officer in charge of the deportations, and she got her pass to the Jewish quarter, and help with hauling the photographic equipment.  It was the fruit of weeks upon weeks of maneuvering, and she even managed an orderly whom the officer gave her and told to take orders from her as from his military superior, and all was well.

She briefed the young man, on the way there, in the fine art of being an anthropological assistant, which is to say, invisibility.  She’d told his officer to send him in civilian clothes, because while the imprimatur of the occupying authority was of great importance politically, it didn’t do to stir things up further with the subjects.  There were large families, in their warrens, mothers and fathers and ten to twelve children—quite marvelous, and a soon to be passing thing, for this prolific stock was to be pruned back, and this phenomenon would be documented for the histories of the Government General as well as for its own intrinsic interest.  

The young man was most helpful, and silent, as he carried the photographic equipment into an outbuilding and helped her to set up a primitive photographic studio, complete with a grey army blanket by way of backdrop, to which she affixed the dressmaker’s tape she carried by way of a reference rule, for use in later measurements on the photograph.  

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Flash fiction: Middle management

Author’s note: In preparation for NaNoWriMo 2009, someone put up daily prompts on one of the forums. I did them in the spirit of warm-ups, but some of them turned into stories. Here is one such.

Prompt: A story in 200 words

Bronze Age burial. Female, mid-twenties, well-nourished for the era; the striations on the bone indicate no consistent overload on the muscles corresponding to heavy work. Skull fractured by ceremonial axe. Buried in common grave with others of the same age, presumably the court of the chieftain. Remains were accompanied by jewelry and other grave goods.

Well, clawed her way to the top of the ladder and for this—buried, at least not buried alive—rather prematurely when the boss kicked off. Remember those Chinese crockery soldiers were a substitute for the real thing. Much more economical to make ceramic simulacra of the emperor’s court than to bury the whole lot of them. Not so much humanitarianism, I suspect, as primitive labor economics.

They want to take it with them. I watch boss-man and I see the narrow childish greed in those eyes. Envy. What someone else has that he doesn’t. He flew to Paris and all he can talk about is the hundred-dollar-apiece meal he and his entourage ate there. The chamber of commerce or whatever they call it loves people like this who are not ordinary tourists. They spend five to ten times what the ordinary tourists do.

(Process information:  10/9/2009 5:17 pm to 5:23 pm; 6 minutes, 199 words)

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Six Sentence Sunday, 20 May 2012 (The Reincarnations of Miss Anne)

Like this fellow, for example, the one to whom she owed nominal obedience as a soldier to his officer.  Yes, she understood the necessity of obedience and discipline; she had been schooled in those notions since childhood, but now she understood as well her mother’s canny female view, expressed not in words but in glances out of sight of the menfolk, that one had to choose husbands carefully, lest one find oneself owing obedience to a fool.  Elsa looked at her superior, her officer in the intellectual armies of the new order, and saw a beanpole of a fellow, pale except for a bit of sunburn across his nose—which showed, after all, that he’d been out in the sun but for a brief time and not with due prudence—with pale, thin hair and steel-rimmed spectacles, with a sardonic mouth and a nose that might not be quite Aryan enough (she wondered what admixture of the East had tainted his Baltic ancestors), with eyes pale enough to be Nordic but somehow watery… 

All the things that might be listed in the inventory of the proper Nordic male, but which did not add up to the splendid specimen in the posters.  To take but one example: the lips were thin enough, no hint of Africa or Arabia about them, no suspect ruddiness or excessive curvature, but instead of making his face that of an ubermensch, he looked rather like… a fish.  Yes, Elsa smiled to herself, rather like something you might turn up in a fish-market on the North Sea, and subsequently fillet and pickle, to serve with a nice sour cream sauce. 

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Flash fiction: Painted smile

Author’s note: In preparation for NaNoWriMo 2009, someone put up daily prompts on one of the forums. I did them in the spirit of warm-ups, but some of them turned into stories. Here is one such.

Prompt: The raindrops painted a silent smile on her lips.

It had been raining all day and all night the night before. The rain sank into the spongy soil and made it weep at every pore.  It dripped green off the fat foliage; it slicked the new aluminum siding.  The rain fell out of a sky grey as fog, clouds mortared together with mist.  You could not see where one cloud left off and the other began.

She stared out at the rain, pulling the white eyelet curtains to one side.  They hung limply in the moist air, like clothes next to a sweaty body on the hottest day in August.  Cold rain rippled on the porch, shimmered in the lee of the house.  He saw her standing there and turned away.  Nothing more was to be said; there was nothing to say.  They had talked three times, four, five, then lost count.  Don’t go to sleep angry. Old advice and it did no good.

Who knows what she was thinking, as she stared out at the courtyard into the steel curtain of mist and rain.  Run quickly, he remembered, dodge among the drops and you won’t get wet.  He and his brothers and sisters had made that one up, however much it might sound like folklore.  He did rather wish she’d let go of her fury and turn to him, but that was equally lonely.  The books were gone, the furniture as well, but she insisted on thinking of this as a war of words.  Which made her restless, realizing how little it had been books that had won or lost anything—or in any case, they were different books, full of boiling points and crystal lattices and neutron cross sections.

He walked toward the shed, trying the rusted handle of the door yet again.  Still frozen in place, of course.  Rust made a rough surface and it stuck to itself.  They’d had at that lock—she had—with a three-pound sledgehammer and it had made no impression.  Nature is slow, stupid, prone to decay.  The new enemy.  The old one was dead, and her friend was headed to the capital to talk over with them what would happen.  Every war is going to be short, over by Christmas according to all of the experts, and then once concluded, every war is the war to end all wars.  Never again, the politicians say, and then proceed to do that which will guarantee the return of that which they say they fear above all else.

The light wavered, coming through the wet glass, and the shadows shifted.  The raindrops painted a silent smile on her lips; shadows found their way into the corners of her mouth—as if she’d been tasting darkness.

(Process information: 10/26/2009 11:47 PM to 11:59 PM, 452 words, 12 minutes)

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Six Sentence Sunday, 13 May 2012 (The Reincarnations of Miss Anne)

And there was the other thing, as well.

He had looked her up and down—well, not quite as blatantly as the soldiers eyeing up the Polish girls—with his pale blue eyes behind steel-rimmed spectacles, and asked in a light tone if she mightn’t have done the Reich a better favor had she foregone the doctorate and become the mother of warriors, as the future needed fine mothers of her make and she was of good Nordic stock.   

She had replied just as lightly that what was done was done, and she was here to do work for which she was uniquely trained.  And as a loyal servant of Party and Reich, no doubt he was ready to make rational use of the resources placed at his disposal.  She had drawn up the list, as well, of the places to which she desired access; her equipment was ready and she awaited only the necessary resources to begin the study.  

There followed days and weeks of fencing over escorts, over days and times, over the work of Aryanization, which necessarily took precedence over mere sentimental study of what was to be swept aside. 

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Flash fiction: It whirred and beeped and buzzed

Author’s note: In preparation for NaNoWriMo 2009, someone put up daily prompts on one of the forums. I did them in the spirit of warm-ups, but some of them turned into stories. Here is one such.

Prompt: It whirred and beeped and buzzed in the most unsettling way.

The Mind Reading Machine. Yeah right.  Hardwood cabinet, red and green lights, dials that made me think it was stuffed with vacuum tubes inside like a prehistoric radio.  “Tells your inner secrets,” said the huckster, hitting the power switch.  His hair was swept back from his face in golden waves, as if it were being blown back by an unusually artful tempest, and some invisible lacquer held it in place so that he looked like a becalmed hood ornament.

The Machine hummed, and the red and green lights flashed on.  It whirred and beeped and buzzed in the most unsettling way.  It was darned heavy, too, because I could hear the table squeaking under it as it finished what the huckster insisted on calling the warm-up sequence.  Without permission, his fingers closed on my wrist and he placed my hand on the plate between the two rows of lights.

The red and green flickered, then settled: four red lights on, six green.

He turned to me and said, “You’re skeptical. You’re thinking that this can’t possibly be as advertised.”

I thought, “And you are a fool if you think I don’t know how you figured that out.”  Because my face is a mirror of my thoughts; my mother had told me that ever since I was five, and warned me that I ought to work a little harder at concealing it–maybe apprentice with a professional poker player, she suggested, as I got older.

I said, “You missed something.”

He said, “It’s not me, it’s the machine.”

I made sure to project this time, so that my rejoinder would be heard through the entire hall.  “Well, then the machine missed something, if you like.  I’m also thinking that you’re the biggest scam artist I’ve met this month, and not particularly good at it.”  I paused, and added, “And that hair has got to go.”

With that I reclaimed my hand, turned away, and walked down the steps into the audience.

(Process information: 10/29/2009, 3:01 PM to 3:08 PM, 330 words, 7 minutes)

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Summer NaNo: Novel Cook Pot (anything is a writing prompt)

When you are a writer, anything is a writing prompt.

There’s nothing quite so powerful as the arbitrary set of ingredients. I’ve used a very elaborate set of constraints (aka the Novel Cook Pot) for each year’s National Novel Writing Month first-draft effort. The Cook Pot (like its culinary counterpart) is ruled by the pleasure principle: I throw in there what I like, what excites me, without regard to contradiction. In fact, contradiction is what runs the whole thing: the tension between things that don’t necessarily belong together, which excites the pattern-making, story-telling brain to create the story that fills the dark places between.

Oh yes, and the pleasure principle means that research doesn’t feel like research, but like digging into the cookie jar. For example, right now I’m doing “research” for my Summer NaNo effort, with the American cousin of the painter from Dorian Gray as my protagonist, and Greenwich Village of the 1910s as my setting. I’ve been kicking back and reading Wilde’s original novel, taking notes and trying to reverse-engineer the magic, and learning about the Village art scene by reading Republic of Dreams, John Sloan’s Gist of Art, the recent biography of Sloan, Robert Henri’s The Art Spirit, Emma Goldman’s Living My Life. Shortly I’m to look up Martin Duberman’s biography of Paul Robeson (who’ll have a walk-on role, because of his collaboration with Eugene O’Neill) and O’Neill’s early plays. I’ll also be watching Warren Beatty’s Reds, which has some excellent scenes set in and around the Village.

Is that research in the grim, white-knuckled way of undergraduate term papers?

Absolutely not. I’m kicking back and swinging my feet in the hammock, letting the waves wash over me.

And as I read Wilde, I’m noticing things about his narrative technique, specifically the use of the senses. Dorian Gray, this most visual of novels, opens with the other four senses; it’s only in the second paragraph that we get a picture. And that’s not accidental, either. I am taking notes. Wilde is known for his quips and cranks, his razor-sharp epigrams, but he’s also a master of poetical description. He held dual citizenship in the realms of poetry and prose.

As I read, all sorts of little things trip new ideas: things I might try, characters or situations or bits of setting. I’m taking notes, not only on a master and older brother in the art, but on the trains of association set off as I read.

That’s a writing prompt.

Poets know the writing prompt, as do song-writers: here is a form, a fixed music; you must fit your thought to it. At its best, poetic form knocks out of your head the first word you reached for, which is probably the one engraved on your nervous system by ordinary language. Poetry is the frontier between language and music.

In the fall, I will be taking up another exciting set of research: the technological attainments of the Alexandria, that marvelous multicultural metropolis of the first century B. C. E., where the land of the Pharaohs met the inheritors of Alexander the Great and the Greek philosophers, with influences as well from African cultures further south and the Mediterranean world, as well as places further east. The central figure is Cleopatra VII, the last of the Ptolemaic dynasty, both famous and enigmatic. I will be writing an alternate-history version who’s none the less rooted in fact: the scholar-physician-politician attested both by the Arabic sources and the reactions of her Roman contemporaries. (Among other things, she’s the true patron of the Julian calendar: it was her court astronomers who consulted with Julius Caesar on the resolution of the technical issue.)

The genre: steam-punk, rooted in Greco-tech, complete with steam-powered warships (counterfactual) and magnetic magic (real), and written as much as possible in the way that the Greeks and Egyptians understood the world, not the way that we see it. It’s a head trip in the purest sense, looking at a lost world through an entirely different intellectual and cultural framework. Cross-over genres and alternate history are a delight, that let us slip anchor and sail off into the wide and wild seas of What If—in a vessel constructed from the Known.

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Six Sentence Sunday, 6 May 2012 (The Reincarnations of Miss Anne)

There’s the motorized roar and the background roar of the sea.  There’s the greyed-out horizon, and the signs for the upcoming exits, Iceland coming up in a few hours and beyond that Denmark and Norway.  

It’s a dream, of course, because in real life there is no highway across the empty waters, over and past the sea-roads trodden by Vikings, by slavers and by pirates who called themselves explorers.  There is no road that passes over the ghost road of the Middle Passage,  no exit for the West Indies or for Ireland.  

It’s real, because the book says there is such a place, and there’s a slowing as the clouds clear and an improbably blue sky breaks overhead, a baroque Mediterranean heaven, and the Utopian consul steps on board to look at her papers and to ask her the purpose of her visit.  What is the answer to that question?

 
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Flash fiction: Not advice, but support

Author’s note: In preparation for NaNoWriMo 2009, someone put up daily prompts on one of the forums. I did them in the spirit of warm-ups, but some of them turned into stories. Here is one such.

Prompt: I’m not asking for your advice, I’m asking for your support.

Demon-summoning is a dicey art at the best of times, and Tatiana’s kibitzing was making it downright nerve-wracking.  First she was fussing over whether my pentagram was really closed, because (as any novice can tell you) you’d best make sure it’s closed or anything you summon can get in there and eat you up.

Which I knew, dammit, because I did not in fact sleep through Necromancy 101, unlike some people I could mention.

Then she was looking at the reference works I had out on the workbench, and telling me that I should probably do this particular incantation using the classical pronunciation of Latin rather than the ecclesiastical, because the best sources had it that this one actually went back to Roman times, and the demons named therein are known to be punctilious on points of culture.

She said that Eugene had told her a rather hair-raising story about a cousin who’d done an incantation in the same family and barely missed getting fried by demon-fire, because the Entity he summoned had expected the Pompeiian pronunciation rather than the true Roman.  And that was with the pentagram closed.

“Look,” I said at length.  “I’m not asking for your advice, I’m asking for your support.”  She looked up from the book, long black hair falling over her face.

“I am supporting you,” she said.  “I just thought you’d want to know what mistakes to avoid.”

“You know, this really isn’t helping,” I said.  “The thaumaturgical safety stuff is fine when you’re just reading, but frankly I’m not going to remember half of what you’re telling me.”

She pursed her lips, plainly offended.  “Well, if you don’t want me here…”

“I didn’t say that.  I want backup, that’s all.  If you’re remembering all this stuff so well, maybe you could hang out here…”

She closed the book, set it on the workbench, and walked over to face me across the pit.  Chalked her own pentagram on the floor, set the oil lamps to burning at the five corners.

Stepped inside, turned to face me.  Jerked her head a little, and I pulled my left foot inside my pentagram.

“All right,” she said.  “You have backup.”

I took a deep breath and opened the grimoire.

“Now remember,” she said, “classical, not ecclesiastical.  And whatever you do, make sure you’ve got the case endings right.”

(Process information: 10/20/2009 6:17 PM to 6:30 PM, 392 words, 13 minutes)

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