Six Sentence Sunday, 31 July 2011 (The Shape-shifter’s Tale)

My job was not a bad job, as my parents reminded me. It was quite a good job, actually, for someone who was not in college (could not be in college), and through one connection or another I had gotten it without having to go through the usual battery of tests: peeing in a cup, and then the cheek-scrape, and the secondary extraction of genetic material. No, I had gotten it roundabout, under the table, and I was the Underground Girl, all around. I got up before dawn, with a sliver of moon in the midnight-blue sky, and only as I was reaching the gates of the University was the sky lightening enough to show color: brass-yellow, metallic and colorless below the horizon, and green-blue and then electric blue and in the vault of the sky, ultramarine, midnight-blue at the zenith and utmost darkness behind me as I turned to the west. Land of the dead, I thought with a shiver.

It doesn’t do to think of the dead; they are my companions at work.

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28 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday, 31 July 2011 (The Shape-shifter’s Tale)

  1. lizculver says:

    Last line was a great hook. Your description of what she had to avoid to get a job though did leave me feeling bad for her – made her differences stand out – nicely done.

  2. sassyspeaks says:

    No slush in this – all she’s doing is thinking yet we see what she feels.

  3. Alix says:

    Perfect description of twilight, and a really great six! Thank you.

  4. Jayel Kaye says:

    nice last line. hooked me

  5. Cate Masters says:

    Great twist at the end! Lush descriptions too, loved it.

  6. Graylin Fox says:

    Love the gorgeous descriptions and then right down to her work.

  7. Gem Sivad says:

    I really got a sense of her and her world through her eyes. Great six!

  8. “Land of the dead” yup, that thought would probably make me shiver too 🙂

  9. Monica Enderle Pierce says:

    Love ‘Underground Girl’ and land of the dead. A very haunting six.

  10. Great world-building in this excerpt! Leaves me curious to read more.

  11. Lindsay says:

    Love the last line hook

  12. Bree Younger says:

    Incredibly vivid descriptions and that last line really pulled me in. Great six!

  13. Paula Martin says:

    Intriguing but sinister at the same time.

  14. gayleramage says:

    Intriguing snippet.

  15. I really got a good glimpse of the character. I like your six and want more!

  16. Marie Dees says:

    Love that last line!

  17. Jennifer Lowery~Writer says:

    Land of the dead…gives me a shiver too! Great six! Thanks for sharing.

  18. Sonya Clark says:

    Lovely description of dawn. Great six!

  19. Illuminating character sketch. And the last line! Zing!

  20. all i can say is wow ….

  21. J.A. Beard says:

    I like the good combination of description and world building here.

  22. Piper says:

    Amazing. Freaking Amazing six. They were terrific. I love the imagery.

  23. Great description. You’re painting with words, especially with the colors of the sky.

  24. Verna Clay says:

    You got me hooked. I knew something had to be up when I read about all those colors. The last line is the kicker. Well done.

  25. Zee Monodee says:

    Powerful extract! You show your character so well in this. Great job!

  26. J.C. Martin says:

    Very atmospheric six! Love the hanging last line!

  27. pippajay says:

    I really like the voice in this. Intrigued by the idea that she is the ‘Underground Girl’ and loved the colour descriptions.

  28. Great description. “Land of the dead” really pulls you in.

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