Six Sentence Sunday, 14 August 2011 (The Shape-shifter’s Tale)

I walk the colonnade of the vast stadium, its staircases rising past the locked gates. Along the top runs a frieze in which the counties are carved, all ninety-eight of them, geography in alphabetical order. The colonnade curves, outsize, all the more so when I’m four-legged: loping as a dog—once as a wolf, too dangerous a form—or a cat, sliding through the shadows as the roof looms overhead. No one notices me. The air is full of news: sex and territory, the tang of urine and hormones, the enticing odors of possible food, furry and live, or fried and redolent of grease, in the leavings by the trash-cans. Squirrels, mice, the occasional rat—no, I don’t tangle with the rats, I’ve been a rat and I know what they’re about.

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22 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday, 14 August 2011 (The Shape-shifter’s Tale)

  1. sassyspeaks says:

    I love the sights and sounds and smells from the character’s POV – almost like I am there

  2. gayleramage says:

    Great description, and love the line about being a rat. 🙂

  3. Marie Dees says:

    Nice descriptions.

  4. Alix says:

    Great descriptions, you pull me right in. Wonderful writing. Thank you.

  5. Love the ‘air is filled with news’ line. Nice way to include smells 😉

  6. Lyrical and powerful.

  7. Makes me want to read more immediately.

  8. J.A. Beard says:

    I really like how you captured the animal-side POV here. That’s something often lacking in shape-shifter stories.

  9. Piper says:

    Wow, very awesome six. I felt like I was right there with the character experiencing what the character did, involving all senses. Great job!

  10. Bree Younger says:

    I love the vividness of this.

  11. Sondra Carr says:

    I’m so glad to have discovered your writing. I not only enjoyed reading your six, I want to study it for craft. You’ve really succeeded in letting the reader see through the character’s eyes.

  12. Monica Enderle Pierce says:

    There’s fantastic depth in this snippet. We get the size of the coliseum, the wonderful instinctive animal brain of the shifter. You used description so effectively. Wonderful writing, EP!

  13. Jennifer Lowery~Writer says:

    Very descriptive six! Nice!

  14. lizculver says:

    Amazing six – you really bring the feeling of being an animal right to our senses.

  15. Sharita Lira says:

    Great six. Descriptions are very real

  16. GREAT use of the senses. You really got into the character’s head.

  17. Vivien Dean says:

    I love the moodiness of the voice. Really drew me in.

  18. Unfortunately, I could actually *smell* the urine. Great six. I’m intrigued.

  19. karysafaire says:

    Vivid descriptions-wonder why it’s too dangerous to be a dog?

  20. HOw interesting and your use of the senses is great

  21. Fab descriptions, well done!

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