Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 17 November 2013 (Inside the Jump)

“This situation isn’t going away just because the Immortal is dead.”

Yasmin said, “I have put another piece in play. Taryn has agreed to speak for us to the Outposts. With your permission, Captains.” 

“Oh no,” Jehen said, “with the permission of the whole Crew. We’re nobody’s navy. This is Sarronny Dome, and we’re going to get consensus on it. All hands on deck for a community meeting.”

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6 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 17 November 2013 (Inside the Jump)

  1. Excellent back and forth between the two characters. Nice snippet!

  2. Nothing is going to be easy, it appears. Very crisp dialog. Enjoyed the excerpt!

  3. Great dialog and pacing. Love it!

  4. burnsmillie says:

    Hmm, I like that everybody gets a say. I like Jehen’s voice : )

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