Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 8 December 2013 (Inside the Jump)

Martisset startled as the iris-gate to the Captains’ station opened, and the Avatar-Ashore emerged, sparkling in all her rig. A true android, run by six or seven of the Ship’s process-threads. “Yasmin Sure-Hand.”

The Avatar smiled and extended a hand. Jehen watched Martisset shake hands with the simulacrum, her eyes widening. The face and hands had been created from the holographic anatomical data taken from every Sarronny cadet on arrival at Karis, so the likeness was seventeen-year-old Yasmin Sure-Hand. 

It was one thing to know the theory, but quite another to encounter the Avatar-Ashore in all its uncanniness, human face and hands perfect down to the fine gestures that one did not even notice consciously, all the rest an artist’s conception of cyborg beauty.

Before she left for Karis in the youth-draft, Jehen had danced at the outer edge of the vortex around such visions, in the yearly festival of the arrival of supplies.


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4 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 8 December 2013 (Inside the Jump)

  1. burnsmillie says:

    This is a little confusing for me, because there are so many characters and I had to read it several times to get a bit of understanding of who is who and what is what. Then I looked at the twitter feed on the side and realized the ship itself is sentient and the android is what speaks for her. But that doesn’t clear up who Yasmin Sure-Hand is, that the likeness should cause sort of a reverence feel, or what Jehen was dancing around…She danced around Cyborgs? But, it’s all very interesting, so I’ll look for more next week, and maybe I can sort out some of these threads and figure out what’s happening : )

    • epbeaumont says:

      The perils of the short excerpt! Yasmin Sure-Hand was Jehen’s sister. Most of her died in a training crash, but she lives on as the Ship’s-Heart, the coordinating intelligence of the starship. The Avatar-Ashore represents the Ship when the Captains and Crew go planet-side (the Ship itself is designed for low-gravity environments).

      And yes, it’s a complicated story.

  2. Interesting excerpt, I’m sure it all becomes clear when one is reading the entire book. I appreciate the detailed world building…really makes me want to find out more.

  3. The story sounds fascinating. It is a little confusing right now, but like Veronica said–reading it in its entirety will clear that up! Great attention to detail. 🙂

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