Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 22 March 2015 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

Yasmin listened, putting her hands up to feel the bells in her tightly twisted braids. They pulled pleasantly on her scalp; she wiggled her ears and they jingled faintly. Jehen looked at her sidelong; even though she was a year older, she hadn’t mastered that trick. The adults’ faces were intent and glowing; Yasmin understood only some of the words.

She had seen the pictures, how their own world was a tiny ball, and outside it ranged the whole universe, which was mostly empty. How Ships traveled from place to place by Jumps, for otherwise they might be thousands of years in transit.

The Journey-ships from the Original World had been like that, for it was only by accident that they discovered and survived the Jump. And then by great luck, they had found Karis, Mother of Worlds, and from there, humans had spread to the other systems that comprised the Inhabited Worlds.


From my work-in-progress novel Ship’s Heart, the prequel to Inside the Jump. Yasmin, Jehen’s younger sister, is five years old and is listening to the call-and-response between the Dome’s ground control and an incoming supply ship.

Weekend Writing Warriors offers a selection of eight-sentence excerpts from many different writers. For the full selection, see here.

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8 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 22 March 2015 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    You’ve hinted at a great deal of backstory in very few words. Good job.

  2. daezarkian says:

    I love your world building. Great snippet, as always.

  3. historysleuth1 says:

    Concur with others. Excellent world building.

  4. Everyone else has said what I’m going to say– good world building, and you can get a hint of the kind of character Yasmin is from just a few lines. Great eight!

  5. Whitney says:

    This is fantastic. I look forward to reading more.

  6. It takes talent to share back story without dumping it on a reader all at once. Well done.

  7. I’m SO enthralled with this world you’ve created for us, can’t wait for more every week. The snippets give such fascinating peeks into the backstory and the characters. Excellent!

  8. Mari says:

    That is definitely a great backstory there! Great snippet.

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