Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 29 March 2015 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

Behind the crew entered a woman whose ordinary brown skin was threaded with scars on one half of her face, and on the other, gave way to glass and ceramic fittings and an unblinking eye that wasn’t anything natural. Gasps of admiration went up from the adult onlookers, and Yasmin was hoisted to her gene-father’s broad shoulder, among a forest of the other children. They didn’t wave to each other, but all turned the same way to look upon the visitor.

“Oh, those are gorgeous repairs,” Altair said. “They kept the Treaty, oh they did.”

The visitor smiled with the human side of her face. The glass-and-ceramic mask on the other side glowed in its spiderweb of leads. Tears shone in the human eye, as the children held out their arms to her, and the adults carried the final chorus of the Song of Fortunate Return: “Mavra Fix-all, welcome home.”

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From my work-in-progress novel Ship’s Heart, the prequel to Inside the Jump. Yasmin, Jehen’s younger sister, is five years old. Mavra Fix-all is a starship captain returning home after the wreck of her ship.

Weekend Writing Warriors offers a selection of eight-sentence excerpts from many different writers. For the full selection, see here.

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5 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors: Sunday 29 March 2015 (WIP: Ship’s Heart)

  1. Lovely snippet! I do have one little, friendly suggestion. The word ordinary before brown seems misplaced. Otherwise, I loved your post.

  2. daezarkian says:

    Gorgeous descriptive details.

  3. Wow, quite the description! I really enjoyed this snippet. Great work!

  4. Eleri Stone says:

    Great description and really interesting worldbuilding.

  5. I loved the details of how her face had been “repaired”….an interesting glimpse into how this world works, and also the way the crowd accepted her return. Excellent excerpt!

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