The ragged tag-end first draft blues

They warned us, of course. Finish the novel in November. Use that last crazy burst of energy to get it all down, and fix it up later.

I’m still finishing it.

There is one chapter that needs rewriting into an actual plot arc, another that’s missing completely, and some sort of epilogue or coda that’s required. Oh yes, and my villain is in hiding. Not good.

So, before all the internets, I am making the following resolution:

Just as soon as my winter holiday begins (Friday) I’m going to take a long walk in the cold and then I’m going to sit down with my wayward manuscript and write until I’m done. And then I’m going to send it out to my long-suffering betas with the warning that it’s a wild first draft, with all that implies.

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Six Sentence Sunday, 18 December 2011 (Annie Brown and the Superhero Blues)

They were apprentice wizards, the three of them, with a penchant for clever hackery. Bertie had sent the three of them to Annie, saying, “She’s an engineer. She could tell you about flying.”

She had meant to tell them that she was in only her first year of study, and in any case she wasn’t planning to do aeronautical engineering.

Tristan said,  “We don’t want to collide with any airships.”

Griselda explained that the documentary film had been most deceiving, because they hadn’t managed to get a flying motorbike to work at all.

[In which Annie meets the steampunk wizard kids: Tristan, Gunnhild, and Griselda, aka Tristan and the Magic Twins.]

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The mysteries of beta reading, or mapping what isn’t there

I am currently beta-reading a number of first-draft novel manuscripts. Over the last three years of National Novel Writing Month, I have been privileged to acquire a small group of first-draft beta-reading friends. Those relationships have grown slowly, out of talking about subjects that excite us, or sharing plots, or just beefing (more rarely, gloating) about the writing life. Trust takes a while to build, and there’s still the terror of handing one’s brainchild over to someone else, lest it be revealed in the light of day to be a monster.

The difficulty of the first draft is that it is a first attempt, a sketchy map of the territory, a roiling soup of raw ingredients, a list of things to do. The most interesting thing of all is the thing that isn’t there. Some parts compel and then end in mid-air; scenes that ought to sing fall flat.

In a word, something’s missing.

Mapping that thing, finding the missing key, divining the intentions and desires of the writer–or guessing at them–and supplying the thing needed: that’s the trickiest business of all. Too often, we can mistake the writer one is reading for the one we meet in the mirror in the morning.

Equally challenging is to map what is there, in particular, the details that strike an emotional chord. That’s the great utility of in-line comments:

“This is the place where I started smiling, and this is the place where I laughed till I couldn’t breathe.”

“This brought tears to my eyes.”

“This detail is really hot.”

It’s the hardest kind of feedback to give, because it’s so very intimate and self-revealing. But fair is fair; the writer has revealed herself/himself in the writing. The beta-reader provides the voice from the other side of the page: one reader’s reactions. Technical feedback is useful, but emotional reaction is the heart.

The shadow side:

“This felt murky.”

“I’m not sure what’s going on here.”

“This creeped me out.” (Well, that could be good news, if one is a horror writer.)

Writing is another face of reading, and reading mindfully is the toughest kind of reading there is.

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NaNo 2011 novel revision plan, revised version

From long experience, I know that I get things done, however ambitious my lists of things to do. However, hardly ever do I get them done on the original timeline.

As I’m looking at the missing pieces of this year’s NaNoWriMo project, The Necromancer and the Barbarian: A Love Story, I’m realizing that finishing draft one by December 15 is completely unrealistic. New Year’s Eve would be workable… and that was the one that I originally set as my goal. “Before January 1” I would send out the manuscript to its beta readers.

What happened? Well, in the heroic adrenalin- and caffeine-driven frenzy of NaNo production, the endorphins started talking: “Heck yeah, bring it on! Sure thing, we’ll build a hydroelectric dam with teaspoons! Give us spit and bubblegum and we will move the world!”

(No, Archimedes didn’t say it that way, exactly. But it’s in the spirit.)

Those pesky endorphins… are the workaholic’s drug of choice. And I did declare, before the cosmos and the internets and everybody, that I am a recovering workaholic, so NaNoWriMo is a dangerous passage for me. There’s a very fine line between creative frenzy and workaholic addiction.

So now, I’m slowing down and daydreaming and making lists and asking questions: what happens here? What’s the transition? Who’s missing in action? Who’s sulking backstage?

(My villain, for one. He’s such a diva, and he’s German into the bargain. Sturm-und-Drang requires rather more sound equipment than mere Emo. He’s ticked off with me that I didn’t personally interview him in October along with the Hero and Heroine. That’s an oversight I will have to rectify in next year’s NaNo. For this go-round, he’ll have to settle for being interviewed prior to the first round of structural revision.)

Creative work has a rhythm like a heartbeat or breathing: there’s the phase of effort and then the phase of no-effort, push and release, generation and reflection. I think this first draft novel will be a full three-months’ effort, and well worth it: a fully grown first draft that nonetheless has the flexibility for extensive revision.

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Six Sentence Sunday, 11 December 2011 (Annie Brown and the Superhero Blues)

Then Sunny’s cell phone buzzed, and the look on her face told all: that was Courtney. Courtney having issues, Courtney being needy, Courtney needing bodyguarding as she went clubbing: Courtney with the black hair and pale pale skin and six-inch heels and skirts so short she looked like she was trying out for superheroine or else chorus girl, and the hot-and-cold manner, clinging one minute and icy-distant, all-business the next.

Intermittent reinforcement, Annie supplied from Psych 101. It gets those rats hopping to, if you give them treats at random intervals, just like every bad country-western or R & B song: “Baby, you’re so nice and then you’re so mean…” She’d wish that Sunny knew better, but a heartbreaker was a heartbreaker, regardless of sex or race, and no matter which sex was the opposite. When she was a naïve teenager, she thought that her love life would have been easier if she’d been into girls, because boys were an alien species, but watching Sunny and Rafe had set her straight on that one.

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Apprenticing with the dead: smashing the four-dimensional fourth wall (Alexander Herzen)

My fiction is full of time-slips and voices from the past surfacing in the present, and foldings-over that make the chain of causality obscure at best.

You know what they say: write what you know. The voices in the next room aren’t necessarily my literal contemporaries, and some of my nearest writer-relatives were dead ninety years when I was born.

Let me introduce you to Alexander Herzen, and tell you why he’s my long-lost brother.

Here’s the tag end of an anecdote about a diplomatic dinner party in London, 1854. The Russians and the Americans were the only ones who could down the Kentucky punch (‘red pepper with an infusion of oil of vitriol,’ as the teller conjectured):

The chemical affinity with alcohol raised me terribly high in the consul’s eyes.

‘Yes, yes,’ he said: ‘it’s only in Russia and America that people know how to drink.’

‘Well,’ I thought, ‘there is an even more flattering affinity: it’s only in America and Russia that they know how to flog serfs to death.’

My Past and Thoughts,  (tr. Constance Garnett, Berkeley University Press), p. 481

That punch line lanced through the 130 years between us in a lightning strike, with all the terror and joy and laughter of the truth succinctly told. I’d had the fourth wall smashed like that once or twice before. But there was a world of difference between Sinclair Lewis nailing 1970s Toledo, Ohio in his 1920s Babbitt, and quite another to receive a personal telegram from the Russia of Nicholas I.

Another line from Herzen, about the ‘ancient Americans of fifteen,’ obsessed with money and career, cemented our relationship as literary fraternal twins. If he knew as much as all that about me and my contemporaries in Reagan’s America, then I was ready to trust him on the matters of his own country and century.

As I read his memoir, My Past and Thoughts, I found myself seized by the urge to write back to him about how right he’d been about the smoke he smelled on the wind. It was blowing his way from the battlefields of World War I and the crematoria of the Final Solution and the various other pyramids of skulls erected by our Political Betters on the road to their notion of the better and braver new world.

My debt to this Russian revolutionary aristocrat is considerable. Herzen introduced me to the nineteenth century he knew, from George Sand to Harriet Beecher Stowe to P. T. Barnum to Michael Bakunin and Karl Marx. I learned Russian to read him in full; his work, like mine, teetered on the razor edge between essay, drama and novel. He taught me the attitude that one’s native language is a playground, and that one may borrow freely and fearlessly from all of its variants as well as from other languages. His mentions of favorite authors made my nineteenth century canon rather different from the one I’d been taught in school. Last, and most importantly, he taught me that critical sensibility, razor wit, and revolutionary ambition are far from contradictory.

Most important of all, he taught me to beware alleged revolutionaries with no sense of humor.

 

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The curious dance of order and chaos

After yesterday’s break, I realized that it was indeed “rest” rather than “being lazy” that made me take a break from looking at the NaNo novel. Today I woke up with very clear ideas about the missing parts: how the fantastic nature of the Great Change might be brought from background to foreground, and which of the plot threads seem to end in mid-air and what might be done about that.

I realize that outlines are more about chaos than order. Let me explain.

The Necromancer and the Barbarian: A Love Story feels very much more like a set of interesting ingredients that I might rearrange. Last year, as I finished The Shape-shifter’s Tale, I had the elation of a finishing the story but horror at how truncated and foreshortened was the endgame. As I launched on the revision process, I despaired of being able to break the pattern of plot that now felt set in stone. This year, on the other hand, I thought about the structure of the plot in advance, and sketched out the endgame. Especially now that I’m using the Scrivener software, I can see the structure of the story. The pieces can be rearranged; I can see which of the plot threads have more scenes, and therefore more relative weight. At a glance, I can separate main plot from subplot(s).

It looks more orderly; I can see the pieces, and rearrange them. Paradoxically, it feels more spacious and potentially chaotic, as in night-before-creation chaotic. That’s the wonderful thing about this project: it’s still full of potential, vibrating with dark and wondrous energy. I am aware of playing with and against the science of forensic reconstruction, bog ecology, and what’s known of the Northern European Iron Age; my narrative plays with and against some very ancient and powerful stories: Pygmalion, Frankenstein, Faust. That’s a huge amount of structure; within that framework the improvisation can become wild and emotionally intense.

First draft is a mess, chaos and darkness over the waters, galactic soup. The outline maps the chaos, and tells what’s missing.

 

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In between times… resting

It felt odd not to write today.

I read, and I rested, and that was it. The story is cooking, and I am not sure where it’s going. It’s cold outside and I spent the day dozing on the couch trying not to succumb to whatever’s going around.

Maybe it’s laziness, or maybe it’s the seventh day of creation.

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Coming back to the beginning, or lessons from the cook pot

Sometimes you don’t know what you were setting out to do until you’ve done it.

Last year, I wrote my first completed story arc for National Novel Writing Month. For the first time, I sent a work out to beta readers to tell me what was fuzzy, what was there and what wasn’t, and where they wanted more. Then I sat down to figure out all of the secondary players in the story. Between March and June, that generated some 60,000 words of character interviews, some of which spawned independent stories.

Starting in May, I took on the “out-of-season” challenge of a monthly MiniNaNo, seven days at 1,667 words a day (the writing rate that will get you 50,000 words in 30 days). I proposed it as a dare for a writing friend (clarke.kent on NaNoWriMo) who wanted to have a successful go at NaNoWriMo.

“It’s a marathon,” I said, “so let’s run some sprints out of season!”

This led to the two of us trying the challenge in June. By July, a loosely coalescing galaxy of friends and colleagues had gotten into the act, everyone from an undergraduate computer scientist writing a research proposal to professional “pulp and proud” novelist buddies to a colleague working on a master’s degree in multicultural education, and thus was Big World Writing Club born.

Then two of us decided to take on the Samhain Superhero Romance challenge, and I was off on my first actual submission for publication. The original proposal for drafting that one was the “Lost Weekend NaNo” which is to say, three days to bang out 33,000 words of draft. I made the deadline, too, though not with the finest piece of writing I’ve ever done. No matter: I have something to edit. “Don’t get it right, get it written.” The journalists are right about that one. You can’t edit a blank page.

Autumnal equinox marked the start of preparatory work for this year’s NaNo novel. I already had a concept, but my freestyle, free-associating internet research of a single day decisively changed the story. I got a character, and that was the beginning of the new project.

Today I started on my checklist for finishing the NaNo novel, and then I started rereading the cook pot from the beginning. It’s fascinating reading, watching the interplay of character, situation and plot. Some writers start with a character, and some with a situation that generates characters, and some with a plot that implies characters and their situations. It’s all the same, really, and the differences only a question of the angle of view. It’s like bone and muscle: they develop together. The inside of the skull bears the impress of the brain and its blood vessels, and the bones are marked by the muscles that attach to them. A novel is a live organism, when it’s right.

The cook pot began with the thing that grabbed me, and it’s useful to review because it takes me back to the essence of the story. That’s the True North both for finishing the story (what story am I finishing?) and for revising (what belongs to this story, and what is extraneous?) The cook pot let me think about plot and characters from the outside, and the character interviews let me get inside the characters’ heads and bring them to life.

The thing that unifies all of this work is so pervasive as to be invisible: sustained work. I resolved to treat all deadlines as arbitrary. This is the first year that I’ve been able to continue work on the NaNo novel once November was over, because I’m already in the habit of working regularly on fiction.

That’s quite a way to come in a single year.

 

 

 

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Finishing the darn thing…

… isn’t easy, but neither is landing a plane.

In stories as in chess, the opening and the endgame open up abysses under our feet. Desperate to stuff all of the important parts into Necromancer and Barbarian before National Novel Writing Month wrapped, I jumped ahead to the crucial fight scene in a bog, between Our Heroine and the serial killer whose victims she has been interviewing for the last five years.

It’s messy. I keep making things up, and then wanting it to be over, and realizing that I’ve opened the way for yet one more twist before we resolve things. Making trouble for the characters creates the plot.

At this point, I want the plot to be over. I can see my ending glimmering in the distance; for once, the problem doesn’t state itself as “what happens in the end” but “how do we get there?” Plot is architecture; it cages the tigers and forces them into proximity.

Someone’s going to get eaten by the end of all this. Someone already has been eaten, by the bog, but that’s not the end of the story. Not yet. Stick with me a bit yet.

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